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Thursday, 4 June 2015

4/06/15 A.T.K Speedwrite: What are Stars?




My Information Report Success Criteria:
Self
Peer
My heading/title:


  • is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)


My opening paragraph/introduction:


  • says what my report is about in a clear way


  • gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification


  • outlines the main features of the subject


My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:


  • have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)


  • are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject


  • give detailed information (factual descriptions)


  • include specific, technical vocabulary


  • are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)


  • may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information


My end paragraph/conclusion:


  • draws the report together/sums up my main points


  • may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found


[Introduction]

Have you ever wondered about the life cycle of stars? Well if you have, then read on this explanation will help you gain more information that you could use to write your own explanation!


[Paragraph 1-Life cycle]

To begin of with the life cycle, stars are born in a cloud of hydrogen atoms and dust atoms that is called nebula. Also there is gravity battling the star, but the core of the star which is nuclear fusion and it’s usually called equilibrium which means it’s the main sequence. The energy produces to help blow much of the disc of gas away, leaving the new star shining brightly. The centre, or core of the proto star gets increasingly dense and hot until nuclear fusion is finally triggered!  Stars sequence lasts depending on the mass of the star and how much hydrogen fuel the star contains. Some stars shine unevenly, and known to be a variable star.



[Paragraph 2 -Appearance]

Have you noticed that most of our stars are all different colours and shapes! One star that makes me really interested in is Orion. The reason why I am interested in Orion is because because it is visible and from we live (New Zealand) in Autumn we can see it in and also in winter and spring! Lastly, we can see that stars are all different colors and shapes and sizes.Stars range in colour depending on how hot they can be. (Temperature) Did you also know that the second brightest star is Canopus!



[Paragraph 3 -Types of stars]

These different types of stars like a proto and dwarf star. Did you that Rigel (the star) is 20 000 degrees and it is also 40 000 times brighter than the sun! Stars that are more than eight times the mass of the sun are called “blue giants”! During a supernova event, enough light is released is outshine an entire galaxy of billions of stars. A supernova are the most dynamic and energetic events in our universe. There are different kinds of stars, there are nova stars, a supergiant star and a dwarf star.


[Conclusion]


Did you know in ancient civilization they knew when a new year had passed by observing changes in patterns in the stars! I hoped you have learnt some information about stars if you still have some questions then go to this website http://www.sciencekids.co.nz/sciencefacts/space/stars.html. Good luck on your explanation.   

4 comments:

  1. Kia ora Ashlyn,
    Well done on completing your speedwrite within the assigned 40 minutes.

    Your next learning steps are:
    1) Most of your information report was well written but you still need to proofread to further improve your work and make sure that your paragraphs make sense.
    2) Make sure that you use correct grammar when writing! There were quite a few grammatical errors that made the writing not 'flow'.

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  2. Konnichiwa Miss Kim,
    Thank-you for my feedback. I do need to work on punctuation, so I probably will opt in for a workshop about grammar. Also I think I should start making my paragraphs more balanced.

    Thank you
    Ashlyn

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  3. Hi Ashlyn,
    Good gob on your writing. I did a information report to. Keep up the good work!!! I can see that you have used your initiative. Please leave a comment on my BLOG THANK YOU!!! http://hpsjamest.blogspot.co.nz/

    By: James

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  4. Wow,I didn't know that stars were different colors and shapes.Can you add in what different colors and shapes the stars were?
    Thanks(WPS)Caroline

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